Sunday morning when I find a girl. A
girl standing in the park and look familiar. She was wearing a pink dress and
white headband. Who is she? So familiar. Who’s that? I smiled, she’s my sister. My beloved sister is a sweet and friendly young girl.
My sister is a sweet girl. She’s fat
and tall. She has wavy hair and dark brown hair. She has light skin, beautiful
skin. If she were thin, she would look more beautiful than now. She is a good
person. Very lovely and of course, she loves to helped her friends. Someday, her
friend was sick. At the moment, my sister came to her friend house. Beside
visited her friend, she also gives information on what she learned in school.
So, her friend wouldn’t miss class. That’s why, I really proud to had sister
like her.
And do you know? She is very
friendly. She always has a smile on her face. As I said before, my sister is
very lovely and sweet. When I went to some places, she always text me and asked
what I was doing there. If I have a problem, she always besides me. She was 6
years old, and already as mature as this. Now I realize that she is the perfect sister that I ever had, in the world.
Hi arini.
BalasHapusgood to reading your post.
overall your post is interesting, but you should pay more attention on grammar.
besides about the grammar, i think you need to pay more attention on the structures. you need to make a good structures about your ideas to make your paragraph better.
overall it's good. visit mine thank you :D
Good story Rin, but you need to write the thesis statement more detail. Overall it is good.
BalasHapus